懂英語幫我看看這段對話有沒有語法錯誤

樓上滴，
就是 can you tell me how i can get my friend back?這句是對的。
can you tell me后面句子是陳述語序~
第二個也是對的， would like do sth,..
there are many beautiful places, some make you linger from

我覺得應(yīng)該是 There are many beautiful places,some of which make you ...那是兩個句子，說著加句號分成兩句。不過我覺得我那樣改的更標(biāo)準(zhǔn)~

I also want to help you, but how can I help you do
應(yīng)該是but how can I help you,
each response may be a long time
我覺得 may take a long time 要好點吧~

Stranger: can you tell me how i can get my friend back?
應(yīng)改為can you tell me how can i get my friend back
Stranger: maybe you can visit one day, you would like
應(yīng)把would改為will